I would have liked more intrapendence on the part of the boys, especially at the height of arousal when she was urging them on; maybe just the smaller one should have lowered her lingerie uncovering her boobs (at which point Sophie could not have said anything more), it would have seemed more natural to me than kissing which is not something a boy in the throes of excitement of finding a half-naked woman available for the first time would seek, just as the older one should have groped her instead of just fixating on this nipple, then I would have reversed the length of the parts, shorter the first part and longer the important sequence. Otherwise, I liked the update but the milking is too obvious because such an update certainly does not take several months