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I know it's annoying and I also know that no one supports Max's path, but I had said that the character's story was easier to write. So what? I know you must be saying this in mind, but I needed to finish. I would like to elaborate a Kate story, but as I said, unfortunately it is incomplete, without many renders to make the characters have interactions and dialogues.
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And the saddest thing is that both stories have great potential. Just the storyline for Kate, DS flushed down the toilet and reduced everything to stupid fucking. As for Max, there was no plot initially. And it would be nice to prescribe the main storyline around the college and the "mysterious club" (which does not negate a bunch of all sorts of sex events and secondary quests). Make several endings (not necessarily even good ones), depending on the passage and parameters of the MC.
Even for Max (yes, this is not a typo), everything could be made interesting. For example, in the prologue, stir up a situation in which Max would have an identity crisis and he took his balls in his fist and began to change his life. For example, so that he takes up his studies, goes to work on his body in a fitness club (or some other sports section) in order to put his body in order. By the way, a good start for getting to know Julia and Kate, as well as working part-time in the same club for Julia. Instead of broadcasting the whole life of the house where you live. In the process, Max learns about the college from Alice at home and from Kate at a part-time job, as well as strange things going on there. Well, and on this to tie the main storyline.
And we get two views on the same story. And arrange it all with TWO games, not one. Events do not have to repeat themselves. You can add anything but the dumbest way to make money - streaming your home. Hell, even playing as Kate and fucking with Neil for money isn't so dumb.
Well, something like this.
Even for Max (yes, this is not a typo), everything could be made interesting. For example, in the prologue, stir up a situation in which Max would have an identity crisis and he took his balls in his fist and began to change his life. For example, so that he takes up his studies, goes to work on his body in a fitness club (or some other sports section) in order to put his body in order. By the way, a good start for getting to know Julia and Kate, as well as working part-time in the same club for Julia. Instead of broadcasting the whole life of the house where you live. In the process, Max learns about the college from Alice at home and from Kate at a part-time job, as well as strange things going on there. Well, and on this to tie the main storyline.
And we get two views on the same story. And arrange it all with TWO games, not one. Events do not have to repeat themselves. You can add anything but the dumbest way to make money - streaming your home. Hell, even playing as Kate and fucking with Neil for money isn't so dumb.
Well, something like this.
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The only thing that is not bad in this novel at the moment is the quality of the pictures and ... that's it. You also need to understand that there are people here who have donated DS on patreon since the development of BB. And we don't look at reviews, we've been playing since the beginning and our opinion comes from experience.
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I'm glad to hear it, but I have to disappoint. I know myself. I am good at analytics, review, editing, as well as the issuance of ideas and their development (this is not only my opinion). But here is the writing of what you mean, I will not succeed.
P.S. I can give out a lot of ideas, with their logical development, but I can’t prescribe them in an artistic form. At most I will get something in the form of a report. Sorry.
Is there a weird bug with New World Order. I've played a few "game weeks" and can't get the random Alice punishing Lisa random event to trigger any more. I noticed an earlier post with "Backyard after midnight" as the last incomplete event not triggering. Any advice greatly appreciated (tried deliberately making mistakes with homework but no effect either, sat by the pool side with Lisa and Alice only at the pool too)
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I understand. Yes, I need not just an idea and its development, but a more detailed script and, most importantly, dialogues
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Well, finish work. I know nobody cares but I tried to be a shit writer 10+ years ago, I used to write fiction, romances..
but it's a little difficult to write eroticism, but not impossible.
This is the final part, my little work ends here (yea Hallelujah); I just wanted to show that it is possible to build good plots and a good story. English it's not my native language, but I always try not to try to "engrish", even if it ends up happening (my eyes get tired for being too exposed to light).
Chapter 1, 2 & 3
Chapter 4
Chapter 5
Previous Chapter
Here I tried to create a script that has personality in the characters, so as the scripts and story got big I had to split it into three parts.
If you like to read, maybe you won't regret it, you will understand what I meant about the game having a rich plot. Enjoy!
In this part we know a little more about Kira, in the first part I show more about. Of all the BB games, they all create the empty character, no personality or a "cheap whore" type woman. For me she should be one of the most important characters and have a high personality like the others. I also show a different side of Ann, as in every game they complained that Ann was stupid and stupid. Yeah, more or less...
Max in College
but it's a little difficult to write eroticism, but not impossible.
This is the final part, my little work ends here (yea Hallelujah); I just wanted to show that it is possible to build good plots and a good story. English it's not my native language, but I always try not to try to "engrish", even if it ends up happening (my eyes get tired for being too exposed to light).
Chapter 1, 2 & 3
Chapter 4
Chapter 5
Previous Chapter
Here I tried to create a script that has personality in the characters, so as the scripts and story got big I had to split it into three parts.
If you like to read, maybe you won't regret it, you will understand what I meant about the game having a rich plot. Enjoy!
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In this part we know a little more about Kira, in the first part I show more about. Of all the BB games, they all create the empty character, no personality or a "cheap whore" type woman. For me she should be one of the most important characters and have a high personality like the others. I also show a different side of Ann, as in every game they complained that Ann was stupid and stupid. Yeah, more or less...
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Max in College
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I also agree, it was a mistake DS put Max in college. I know a lot of people don't like BB but it's something more familiar that people like more, perhaps because the old game was not continued and did not have an ending or also some were disappointed with the new versions of clones. I usually don't like to see an MC do super well in their stories or that everything is easy, but it's a porn and erotic game and I see the public want more of it. At the time when DS announced the crossover I believed it would be one thing but then it was another, that however everything was not very good. I believed that the two stories would have an impact, for example Karen and Kira would have already met, if Alice was with Max Kate would be in another relationship so things could move forward. It's not an easy task and it's also not something that can work out, as I tried to create.
I see a lot of people complain about the DS, sometimes because of the writing, other times about this and that, but it is not so easy for those who are not fluent in English, you end up making a lot of mistakes when writing and getting confused a lot with the words, this can also end up giving you exhaustion and discouragement, because all the time you ask yourself, was it good? It didn't turn out well, and you end up trying to get more inspiration and inspiration is something instantaneous that if you stop for a moment your mind goes blank and you forget everything or end up losing focus, this has happened to me several times.
I see a lot of people complain about the DS, sometimes because of the writing, other times about this and that, but it is not so easy for those who are not fluent in English, you end up making a lot of mistakes when writing and getting confused a lot with the words, this can also end up giving you exhaustion and discouragement, because all the time you ask yourself, was it good? It didn't turn out well, and you end up trying to get more inspiration and inspiration is something instantaneous that if you stop for a moment your mind goes blank and you forget everything or end up losing focus, this has happened to me several times.
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In the world of this game, everyone's either a lonely horny slut or a closet slut.
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Okay. Here's what's going to happen. DS is going to drop Glamour because it's obvious the wheels fell off the bus. A reboot of BB! Now wait for it... You can play as either Max trying to bang you family, or you can play as Eric slamming Ann in the beginning and cucking Max by seducing the sisters! Eh!? Brilliant, or what?