VN Ren'Py My New Girlfriend [Ch.5 v3] [CircleGames]

[SymbioticLife]

I’m still working on updating my translation, and it seems that Sai’s first dialogue (which was modified) affects quite a few other lines—like lines 412 to 414 in this prologue, which now needs an adjustment.

(If any Patreons see this, please report it to the proofreaders, thanks!)

I hope there won’t be too many updates like this, because tracking down the affected lines could be a real pain. Off the top of my head, I’m thinking of the video game scene and the park scene in Chapter 5, but I haven’t checked yet…

So, before I bother the proofreaders, I just took a brief glance at those lines and then the video game and park scene and I'm failing to see the inconsistency. Sai doesn't know that Eric and Vi are dating, this seems to be consistent.


"Damn, I should have told him about me and Vi"
"I feel bad now"
That's from the video game segment


"Maybe it's time I open up to Sai..."
"...keeping him in the dark isn't helping at all"
from just before the park.


"Sucks that he doesn't know about me and Vi"
"Maybe I can tell him soon, since Vi already told Ari about us"
this is lines 412-413 from the prologue for context. Am I missing something?

 

[Dercuillo]

So, before I bother the proofreaders...

Lines 300 to 304 (new) suggest he knows even if Eric say "You are just imagining shit"

If the rest of Sai’s dialogues are supposed to stay unchanged, maybe something should be added here to emphasize that Eric is trying to convince him that no, they’re not dating… At least, that’s how it seems to me…

EDIT: OR just remove this lines that aren't so important after all...

sa"I saw you two talking...she seems to like you..."
e"Wha...what!?"
e"You are just imagining shit"
play sound "malesmirk.mp3"
sa"Maybe...maybe not..."

But also perhaps I misinterpret this!

 

[Badboll]

The author of the game has already talked about the genre of this game a trillion times. On the first page of the game, the description says what genre this game is dedicated to. Go and play NTR games buddy no need to cry.

It might still happen in the future though, maybe when the game is done the dev will add a few choices that will change what happens and how it happens. I wouldn't complain, but obviously completing their vision with a nts game first would be the best.
That's what they want to do so that's what they should do. If the dev gets enough requests on patreon for NTR it might happen eventually. But only if the dev wants to create it.
There is nothing wrong with asking for it, it's still the devs decision to make what they want.
I prefer the game as it is. But some variety is good as well.

 

[Dercuillo]

SymbioticLife, not related to the above but I think there is a lil' problem with Anya's pictures:

Line 545 and 549 are calling the same image (rc anya2) -> useless
Edit: in fact rc anya2 is called 3 times in a row beginning at 522
Line 584 is calling rc anya4 instead (I think) rc anya5 (-> rc anya5 is the new rc anya3 but is not called at all in this update)

 

[SymbioticLife]

If the dev gets enough requests on patreon for NTR it might happen eventually. But only if the dev wants to create it.

There are already far more NTR games than NTS games, why do NTR fans feel the need to come into every NTS thread - and they do this in literally every one I've seen - and beg and plead (and even insult others) endlessly to make the game NTR? But no, I don't think he's compromising his game design just because a small subset (and it is the same names mostly every time) of very loud people continually make the same attack.

Lines 300 to 304 (new) suggest he knows even if Eric say "You are just imagining shit"

If the rest of Sai’s dialogues are supposed to stay unchanged, maybe something should be added here to emphasize that Eric is trying to convince him that no, they’re not dating… At least, that’s how it seems to me…

EDIT: OR just remove this lines that aren't so important after all...

sa"I saw you two talking...she seems to like you..."
e"Wha...what!?"
e"You are just imagining shit"
play sound "malesmirk.mp3"
sa"Maybe...maybe not..."

But also perhaps I misinterpret this!

I think for this Eric just assumes Sai might have an inkling the two are attracted to each other and is teasing him about it, not necessarily that he's actually read into the fact they're already dating.

SymbioticLife, not related to the above but I think there is a lil' problem with Anya's pictures:

Line 545 and 549 are calling the same image (rc anya2) -> useless
Edit: in fact rc anya2 is called 3 times in a row beginning at 522
Line 584 is calling rc anya4 instead (I think) rc anya5 (-> rc anya5 is the new rc anya3 but is not called at all in this update)

I'll report this this to the proofreaders.

 

[Dercuillo]

I think for this Eric just assumes Sai might have an inkling the two are attracted to each other and is teasing him about it, not necessarily that he's actually read into the fact they're already dating.

Possible, but in that case, not great, because his ‘maybe not’ is typical of their banter, whereas here, he’s in full ‘yeah, keep talking, whatever’ mode.

But if we go with that, then there should be some lines like ‘I knew it’ or ‘You were a jerk for hiding that from me’ somewhere—echoing their very first conversation.

All in all, this calls for some tweaks… (well, if we’re really nitpicky about consistency)

 

[Silver2301]

The old art looked better imo it gave VI the innocent look and her eyes also got a lot smaller the only upgrade i see is the color tone and her breast i guess.

 

[Badboll]

There are already far more NTR games than NTS games, why do NTR fans feel the need to come into every NTS thread - and they do this in literally every one I've seen - and beg and plead (and even insult others) endlessly to make the game NTR? But no, I don't think he's compromising his game design just because a small subset (and it is the same names mostly every time) of very loud people continually make the same attack.

If you weren't so hellbent on getting mad about NTR maybe you'd read what I actually wrote first? And no it's not an attack to ask for something you enjoy to be added to a game. It's not a small subset of people either, it's a pretty large chunk of people why else would there be so many games for it?
Also I am more of a NTS fan than I am NTR. You'd know that if you read what I wrote before getting mad.
Vanilla people come in to every NTR game and complain too, insult people I play all kinds of games and I never see ntr people do anything but ask and get insulted for asking. Asking is never wrong. Stating you wish for a game you enjoy to have something else you enjoy added is also not an attack on everything other people find holy. It's such an overreaction.
I wrote it might happen eventually if the dev wants to do it. That implies if people actually pay the guy and ask for it enough it might happen, or it might not. He might just get annoyed by it. Which is fair, but people who pay for things have a right to at least ask for things and give suggestions, just as people do here.
Devs do not have to listen.
The guy I responded to even said the guy he responded to was crying, he wasn't btw, that guy just made that up in his own mind.
The guy just stated what he wanted and moved on and was met with hostility.

 

[bircburner]

I preferred the Melkor look of chapter 1 but still appreciate the game regardless of rework. Months late, but imagine complaining about stealing art on a pirate forum. Mother fuckers acting like they got their money robbed.

 

[SoaringClouds]

I had high hopes for this when it first came out, but it's beaten my expectations. Holy crap, talk about a quality product, lol. I'll definitely have to subscribe now, lol (not even for the benefits, but they deserve it). It's going to be hot as hell when Vi finally starts playing around with others a bit more than she did with Sai.

 

[RabaBamdev]

whats on this v2 update? only artwork?

 

[Dercuillo]

whats on this v2 update? only artwork?

A few images and a few lines of text for the prologue. And some minor UI tweaks.

 

[ItsNotUs]

a cuck is still a cuck no matter how its phrased and well sai and eric are cucks if you enjoy ya girl getting off with someone else

In the case of NTR, this is "jargon", because peolple just started calling the protagonist that way, who often doesn’t even know that he is being cheated on, but in NTS it’s the other way around: a person experiences excitement from the fact that his partner is having sex with someone else + may experience excitement from humiliation, which is not the case in the first case!

 

[wqe]

Come to think, that having a choice with girls in this game would be a banger. U can go full Vi and having a vanilla/ntr/nts ending or choose another girls. Mainly reason because of how protagonist react to them. Especially his sister and that one from one-punch man.

 

[abirvg]

Really? They deleted my comment criticizing this dev.. I still have doubts about why it is possible to criticize some devs and not others. There are others that I criticize in the same way but nothing happens. But the curious thing is that the deleted comments are always on b-b-c games.

Look, I didn't even see your comment - and don't know what the discussion was about. So maybe I'm wrong. But from this statement alone:

Perhaps when someone's starting a heated debate about people's skin color... you know? It's a debate about people's skin color.
Where could it lead? I wonder.

Of course, it would be shut down.

Again, I could be completely wrong.
But it's kind of odd of you to specifically mention bbc as a reason for your comment to be deleted.

anything that derails or goes off topic gets removed so yeah seems like brown nosing is the way lol

What is "brown nosing"?
It's not the first time I encounter this metaphor here.

 

[palmtrees89]

What is "brown nosing"?
It's not the first time I encounter this metaphor here.

White knighting, kissing someones ass...that kinda stuff. Some people like to use the term for anyone who isn't hating on the game or its developer basically. Completely wrong usage of the words imo, but hey.

 

[Ceagle]

NTR or cheating would be awesome not much but just a lil bit

There is cheating in the game currently. Eric gets a hj from Maki and Vi doesn't, and still doesn't know about it.

 

[omgx123]

Nice art, what kind of AI and tech does the dev use to generate the images?
And if it is purely AI is used for art, then surely updates would be bigger and more frequent, no?

 

[Dercuillo]

Nice art, what kind of AI and tech does the dev use to generate the images?
And if it is purely AI is used for art, then surely updates would be bigger and more frequent, no?

Go the fan-art thread, you may find there all the info you need!

 

[kristo0086]

If you weren't so hellbent on getting mad about NTR maybe you'd read what I actually wrote first? And no it's not an attack to ask for something you enjoy to be added to a game. It's not a small subset of people either, it's a pretty large chunk of people why else would there be so many games for it?
Also I am more of a NTS fan than I am NTR. You'd know that if you read what I wrote before getting mad.
Vanilla people come in to every NTR game and complain too, insult people I play all kinds of games and I never see ntr people do anything but ask and get insulted for asking. Asking is never wrong. Stating you wish for a game you enjoy to have something else you enjoy added is also not an attack on everything other people find holy. It's such an overreaction.
I wrote it might happen eventually if the dev wants to do it. That implies if people actually pay the guy and ask for it enough it might happen, or it might not. He might just get annoyed by it. Which is fair, but people who pay for things have a right to at least ask for things and give suggestions, just as people do here.
Devs do not have to listen.
The guy I responded to even said the guy he responded to was crying, he wasn't btw, that guy just made that up in his own mind.
The guy just stated what he wanted and moved on and was met with hostility.

Dude, no need to lie, NTR fans don't ask, they beg, beg, and even persuade the developer to add this content. I've seen people like that in all the new NTS games that have been released over the past year.
Here is an example in the nyatorase game.

Well, first but nothing, it's a shame there aren't NTR path in the future of the game.

In second place, that manga that you cite is a NTR story... The FMC it's called Tsubame if I don't bad remember, and her story is a NTR story not NTS (That I remember right xD )

In thirth place I understand you want to make a NTS game and only NTS game, but the people prefer NTR over NTS (Not for nothing you will find a HUGE amount of NTR games and a REALLY few amount of NTS games)

In last place I will give you a recomendation for remark my point, if you have time search the manga "Kanojo wa Nerewareteiru" from Netorare no Tami it's a NTS full story, or was it? I will let you discover it if you read it.

P.D. : I almost forgot, where you make that very good art style I was searching how make a Comic/Manga but I can't find a good IA page but without success