One thing I will say as a point of constructive criticism - the writing needs to make up its mind whether the protagonist is an avatar for the player, or a character in and of herself. Right now it's trying to have its cake and eat it too on that point, and it's pretty jarring at times, particularly when the game tells me what "my" thoughts are - one, "get out my head, Charles!", and two, it presents them in first-person. Doing it that way takes it a step too far out of the zone of "a DM-like narrator is telling you what your character is experiencing" and into the realm of "this is actually a character with their own thoughts, feelings, and personality independent of yours, that we're for some reason elsewhere in the text pretending is just an avatar to represent you." To analogize to non-porn games, most of the time she's handled like a player character in a Bethesda game, then wham, suddenly the game decides no, for just a minute she's Cloud Strife instead.
Now, which way to go? Well, in 'normal' games I'm fine with either approach; both have their good points depending on what kind of story is being told. But when it comes to porn games, my personal preference as a male player (which I would imagine constitutes the majority of your player base) for female protagonist games is that the protagonist be an actual character with her own story I'm just there to guide her through, so to speak, rather than an avatar for me to inhabit. After all, if a girls' getting felt up in a sleazy bar, I'm not gonna be fantasizing about being *her*, I'm gonna be fantasizing about being the creep feeling her up. But IDK, maybe I'm wrong that that would be the majority opinion, or about who the main target audience for this game is.
