Ren'Py - One Week Away [v0.1.6 Hotfix] [kmmgames]

For an initial release (with apparently one update) it's off to an okay start. Few grammatical errors, renders are not amazing but certainly decent. Models are attractive enough, though facial expressions for some scenes could use some work. The dialogue and story writing are not bad but a few times there were some rather awkward and just nonsensical moments. I'm not entirely sure it's worth a 4 star rating, perhaps more fitting for a 3, but it has room for a lot of potential and happy to give it a bump to see where this one goes.

this is not that bad nor a bad story renders are okay but story its much longer than it is now i get that it is just starting out and all but it could get better in time as it progresses . but what it is lacking is choices their are no choices thus far unless it is missing a tag or two it is the only thing that is holding it back for those that like story driven choice based VN otherwise it is not to bad . in fact it is a kind of unique twist or take on the whole m/s incest which i find refreshing but i have seen similar stories but not many so it is still unique in that regard and if done properly could be pretty good to great .

One Week Away is an ambitious incest game. The beautiful heroine is a big motivation for me to play this game. Although traveling alone is a bit old-fashioned, this game still attracts me because it has a more reasonable reason and a beautiful heroine. I also like the stockings she wears. Please continue to update.

VERSION: v0.1
SUMMARY: Porn logic story with half baked everything else....
RATINGS: (out of 5):

1. Models: 4
2. Animations: 3
3. General Visuals: 3
4. Characters: 2
5. Story: 1
6. Writing: 1
7. UI & Gameplay: 3
8. Content (amount): 1
9. Sound & Music: 3
10. Fetish & kinks: 2

Average: 23 of 50 possible points giving a 46% rating i.e. 2 stars.

PROS:

1. Decent enough looking models
2. Music and sounds are good for immersion, but not good in themselves
3. If playing what I believe is intended story i.e. incest game, the MC and family at least somewhat look related, making that more believable.

CONS:

1. Some renders are poorly done with regards to model interactions e.g., father holding beer glass with open hand...
2. Silly writing and cheesy dialogue that is so forced and bullshit to try and create a narrative that is totally unbelievable. e.g. dynamic between MC and "wife"
3. Dialogue box opacity setting would be nice.
4. Poor story planning and scenes are nonsensical. Also, the MC is already clearly depraved and seems to have no reservations screwing around with his fathers wife, no lowering of any inhibitions, simple porn logic bullshit.
5. Music and sounds are basic and not very good, sounds like MC jizzing sounds like someone pressing grapes but in a cartoon...
6. This version is done before it started having very little content.

FINAL OPINIONS, THOUGHTS & SUGGESTIONS:

• Game starts weird, clearly we are meant to understand there is a fight between "mom and dad" but when the MC comes down the dad is having a beer (yet complains to wife he needs to get to work?) Wife sits next to him like they having breakfast and she is going out for dinner) The whole scene feels setup wrong like its evening and not morning...not sure what the dev is trying to do here but its not working for me.
• "Wife/Mom/Landlady" "looks annoyed as fuck" yet no render, she looks fine, neutral...bit lazy here and more renders would be appreciated.
• Added to the scene not making sense, the "woman" dressed in dinner clothes, is gonna make our MC food, she stands up from the table (that has fuckol on it BTW) miraculously drops a fork she got somewhere, after equally impressively gives the MC his breakfast that just appeared too...again WTF is the developer doing, this is just lazy planning and writing. Think about what your scenes are trying to convey, think of your player so that it makes sense to them, maybe it makes sense in your head but not the player, sure as shit not mine...
• Personal gripe about the MC, the wifebeater shirt and "bruh" way of talking...fuck me its cringe worthy and added to that, its not really believable that the MC would talk that way, considering the household he comes out of, his family are well off and he looks to be rather well educated, at least by the intro and going to college etc...maybe im just out of touch but its really bad.
• Also wife and husband are having a spat while sitting next to each other? again, scene is just wrong, nonsensical. The whole event and plot point that the husband simply shrugs the wife off, the way its done is so blatant and final that I find it not hard, but impossible to believe a trip was planned in the first place, people don't act or speak that way simply, there would have had to be a fair amount of discussion before then. Its just unrealistic and poorly planned writing.
• The husband is also written out so easily through the MC taking the "wife" on vacation instead, no effort to convince her was needed, its all too forced, planned and unrealistic. The MC also acts like his "mom/landlady" has never bent down in front of him, again indicating the MC is actually a depraved pervert, but also the ways its written, the player sees the MC get up the morning and now is simply like this? Goes from normal college kid to depraved motherfucker in 2.5 seconds, haha record...
• This game is basically and simply bad, visually not bad, needs some polish but its story is total horseshit and the dev needs to rethink their approach with this. If they passionate about VN games like this, stop and redo it, else you simply telling players you creating a simple game to bait simple people to spend money and support on. I would not support this.