This is maybe the best game so far. I hope you can hold up the good work Dev. Really love that game.
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The issue with Keira is known (it's a variable not set correctly, will be fixed in the future, if you need an immediate fix check my post on the previous page - if you don't know how to do that (fixing, I mean), PM me and I'll explain in more detail).
The thing with Amy is: she's just an intern (mentioned in the game at some point) and Lisa is asking for her to get a (real) job (beyond that internship), so there's no plothole...
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I know Python..like said..not looked into the code myself....will check your post. (reading that..it seems like the blackmail doesn;t trigger. That was not what I referred to. if you do not leave the drive with her...you later tell Mary that you did).
I never said a plothole but it is an inconsistency and bad continuity...and there's a few moments like that...like odd scenes that seem out of order...or dialogue that seems like it should be there but isn't...and vice-versa.
Would it have been so hard for an extra line of dialogue telling Lisa she already works there...and you'll see what you can do? Or to actually make what you said...actually obvious from lisa? Would have taken what..5 more words? Small nitpick maybe (like sex descriptions which in no way match the image, that really annoys me froma writing perspective)...but such a polished and quality story, renders....these little small things let it down.
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it's her not him, her name is Karen, she is a neighborIt's a pity for me that Nicole sent nude photos/video to that asshole again who's blackmailing her. In my opinion, it would be a good idea to report fast to the MC and act quickly.
and she has a daughter, that's what mary told in a conversation to mc 
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I know, from the last scene. We meet her daughter, she's drunk while driving car.her name was Karen, she is a neighbor
The dev either made a mistake there or retconned that, because when Mary told the MC that she found the blackmailer the MC said that he remembers her and that she had a son named David.it's her not him, her name is Karen, she is a neighbor
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thanks for the information about that girlI know, from the last scene. We meet her daughter, she's drunk while driving car.
, and i don't know she is the daughter of Karen how do you know thatDamn I didn't notice that, now it makes sense with the change from son to daughter.I know, from the last scene. We meet her daughter, she's drunk while driving car.
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Mary tells us the daughters name...so seems likely it is her...or it's 2+2 and getting 43 heh.thanks for the information about that girl
While she makes her confession she says her full name Jessica Smith.thanks for the information about that girl
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i know about the daughter, but i don't know it the drunken girl was her
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The story presentation just got worse with this last update. So much cringy dialog and wasted potential being lost here trying to get too overly cute chasing too many fetish angles, and which as a total sum just adds up to your typical drivel attempt at a story that unfortunately just serves to drag down a 5 star girl game. Which probably explains why this game is sitting where it is at on patreon instead of at least double that at this point after such a super promising v1.
Ditch the backstory element with the "family", ditch the inclusion of a literal interpretation harem, and this game likely leans a lot better on it's strong point. Even with an average story done with a more KISS focused approach that wouldbe easier to do out of dev when writing isn't going to be the strong point (which is always going to end up as an emphasized fail when you are going to try and write in even passable and non-cringy come-home-to-fuck-my-family/harem story stuff). Ya know, something like:
You play the role of a 27-year-old who's father ran off and married another woman when he was young. He returns to his father's hometown after nearly 10 years to hear his father's last will and testament. You control the MC as he attempts to exact revenge on Linda, the woman he suspects had a hand in his death. Plotting his revenge, the MC falls deeper and deeper into the world of secrets of his father, discovering things he never had any clue about. The MC will have to come face-to-face with his dark side and while trying to screw every girl he encounters along the way. Help the MC find out the truth by playing "REVENGE"
Ditch the backstory element with the "family", ditch the inclusion of a literal interpretation harem, and this game likely leans a lot better on it's strong point. Even with an average story done with a more KISS focused approach that wouldbe easier to do out of dev when writing isn't going to be the strong point (which is always going to end up as an emphasized fail when you are going to try and write in even passable and non-cringy come-home-to-fuck-my-family/harem story stuff). Ya know, something like:
You play the role of a 27-year-old who's father ran off and married another woman when he was young. He returns to his father's hometown after nearly 10 years to hear his father's last will and testament. You control the MC as he attempts to exact revenge on Linda, the woman he suspects had a hand in his death. Plotting his revenge, the MC falls deeper and deeper into the world of secrets of his father, discovering things he never had any clue about. The MC will have to come face-to-face with his dark side and while trying to screw every girl he encounters along the way. Help the MC find out the truth by playing "REVENGE"
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I disagree. It was in my opinion the dev painstakingly changing three major things and grinding the release of an update to a halt that hurt it's popularity, temporarily. This vn doesn't need anymore changes and is great as is. There are other vn's out there if it ain't your bag, but for this to pretty much change everything is crazy to me.
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What is it with people trying to change devs games to suit themselves....
No, just no.
Yours sounds like rape fest trash I see in those shitty mass produced RPGM's. It's fine if you don't like it but don't try and turn it into your shitty abomination.
This is the devs story, you want that garbage make your own. I enjoy this, I don't want it turned into that shit show you typed out.
Popularity among who? The pirates here with multiple accounts who pretty much make a daily habit out of jumping from thread to thread obsessively criticizing games to push their own individual preferences to see the same things (or non inclusion of things) in every one?
In the grander scheme of things that is just more of the contributing factor to the problem then any type of solution towards why so many of these games end up with rubbish stories
I also wasn't actually saying he change anything with this one either. Since it's too late for that anyway. This game is already too far into development to turn itself around from it's fated course. Was more a learning suggestion for the next one, as once past the disconnect factor he has going on the dev certainly has the talent to put out something that will do a lot better financially with his target base then this one ever will.
As I rated it it in my review, still a 4 star game for me just based on the girls. Could of just been a lot better imo.
I don't even tend to like Dom paths in my games actually. But it definitely seems to have an heavy influence on the story he wants to write here.
So yeah. if it sound rapey that is still his game you are talking about there. Not to mention his own summary writeup in the OP I simply changed a few lines of text on. My suggestion was just minus the need to include a bunch of extra in game dialog trying to justify why literal harems are ok, and the come-back-home element theme.
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