VN Ren'Py Abandoned She Is My Precious [Ep. 4] [Finest Art Productions]

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God_Batman

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Why is everyone complaining about sandbox in this game specifically? There's a thousand other games with sandbox out there like Milfy City or Long Live the Princess and I don't see people complaining about it there.
The thing is, the dev isn't rich enough as the other games so they will throw a tantrum here as they can't be frustrated somewhere else.
they don't even write a decent opinion on why they hate the sandbox tag...they just hate it for no reason.
 

Three Point

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Why is everyone complaining about sandbox in this game specifically? There's a thousand other games with sandbox out there like Milfy City or Long Live the Princess and I don't see people complaining about it there.
Try complaining in the Milfy City or Long Life the Princess topic, you will run the risk of being warned or banned for a certain amount of time.
This game is really cute as the protagonist's daughter.
 

Three Point

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It works on my machine™
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Are you playing on PC, Mac or Android? Full or compressed version?

The fun fact is that this is a visual novel.
Iirc roaming mechanics have been only used on Episode 1, when the MC tidies up his house before tutoring the girls.

When the girl has been conceived, the MC and Emily were listening to a famous Italian singer. And now she is an avid fan of him. :p
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Io penso positivo perché son vivo, perché son vivo, niente e nessuno al mondo mi potrà fermare dal ragionare...
Lorenzo Cherubini "Jovanotti"
 
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ArturiousDesign

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It's a pretty good one too, just suffers from the disease that strikes many devs when they go to write a summary- lots of vague words, and at the end of the paragraph you're wondering "alright, but what's it about?"
I have a game. I made my premise very simple and understandable. I also have some Incest ideas and again, the premises are understandable. I don't understand why they can't fess up to what the made and just write something we all understand. (my game is still wip and unreleased)


 
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AlBetGam

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I have a game. I made my premise very simple and understandable. I also have some Incest ideas and again, the premises are understandable. I don't understand why they can't fess up to what the made and just write something we all understand. (my game is still wip and unreleased)


I think it's the temptation some writers have to try and be 'literary' about things, combined with a fear of giving away spoilers. So they write something that sounds like the dust-jacket blurb to the nth edition of a classic book- lots of boldly vague promise, little to no description of premise. Which tends to be a mistake when you're trying to sell to an audience that really just wants to know what kind of stuff happens in the game, and would be satisfied with a sentence as simple as "you discover a daughter you never knew you had".

Your game's got an interesting premise by the way, look forward to it coming out.
 
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Yngling

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It's a really nice game and story, but what I don't really get is the puberty blockers angle.

I mean, apparently, she didn't have her period yet, but she's quite well developed physically.

I think puberty blockers should at least greatly slow down the growth of breasts, right?
 

ArturiousDesign

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It's a really nice game and story, but what I don't really get is the puberty blockers angle.

I mean, apparently, she didn't have her period yet, but she's quite well developed physically.

I think puberty blockers should at least greatly slow down the growth of breasts, right?
that premise is mad SUS. Just have her take the pill so MC doesn't knock her up ... or just make a loli game like he obv wants to ...
 

Greily

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The puberty blocker angle sounds like it was meant to tie up any loose ends about her purity, that and the chastity belt. More then likely an attempt to keep the audience from pulling out their pitch forks when they started hearing she was isolated from the world with strange men and trained to be obedient. I'll bet she's physically mature just to avoid the anti-loli crowd.

The real question you should ask was why these two weren't plotting moving in together, isn't one of the girls you're tutoring a waitress? So they could have made their way, how you gonna say Emily got adopted after showing her having sex? The game is visually appealing at least.
 

belovedeggs

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So three problems I see with this game (love everything else about it tho)

1. The name is a meme and not in a good way :\
1b. Not much you can do at this point as it's not so bad that you need to change the name.

2. Somewhat stiff dialog, not as horribly dry as some others I've read but not that good either.
2b. I suck at writing in general but I'm even worse at dialog so can't really complain that much... or suggest anything to help >.>

3. The puberty blockers bullshit is dumb.
3.b It'd make more sense for them to have her be on birth control(to avoid a repeat of the Emily situation) and have her have some weird allergic reaction to it that partially stunted her puberty, it's still weird but it makes more sense for the creep adoptive parents to do and it's more vague and thus easier for us to suspend our disbelief.

(Again I suck at creative writing so take my suggestion with a grain of salt)
 
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