RPGM Sword Art Online: The Trap of Breath Concealed Magic [Part 2 v0.79] [Fujino]

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karlA29 said:
Well, as for me, this is the stupidest thing that the author of a game about corruption and NTR can cram into his plot. He puts an attitude in the heroine's head that she can't go against, and absolutely any nonsense can fit into this fetish. Here's an example for you.
Asuna goes to Kirito's house and hears the sounds of sex from Inoda's house. She looks into his room and sees Inoda lying on the bed with 2 women. It's clear from their appearance that they've been having sex for hours.…
Asuna–Inoda, what the hell are you doing?! Are you completely fucked up?
Inoda – Oh, Asuna, it's you! You know, I've been fucking these 2 sluts for 3 hours now. It seems that my penis already has calluses and it hurts. Come on, comfort me.
Asuna, under the influence of this fetish (maternal instinct), approaches Inode
Asuna - how do you want me to comfort you?
Inoda – First, gently suck it!
Asuna takes Inoda's cock in her mouth and starts sucking…
The situation is totally fucked up!!! but!!! She completely matches the received fetish!
What is the meaning of a work about corruption with such fetishes? With this approach, it was possible to write at the very beginning of the game when Asuna, Kirito and Inoda met.
Asuna – Who is this guy? Let's help him, Kirito!
Inoda stood up, took out his penis, and hit Asuna on the forehead with it.
Kirito – What the fuck are you doing, asshole?!
Meanwhile, Asuna falls to the ground on her back, spreads her legs and says – Fuck me any way you want, wherever you want and in any position!
That's the story of corruption.…
For me, the plot died precisely after Asuna received these two fetishes – "Maternal Instinct" and "Only Inoda's penis can satisfy Asuna." Approximately update 0.4 (sex in a tent in nature). After that, everything the author writes is just blah–blah-blah between the sex scenes of Asuna and Inoda. All these blah blah blah things don't affect the plot at all. And those who say that the only interesting character in the game right now is Suguha are absolutely right. There's at least some intrigue and development here. Everything else is just nonsense.
Again, this is a purely personal opinion. You can see it in a completely different way.
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First of all I'll give you credit for the first scenario you wrote that's hot. Next is it took quite awhile before introducing those perks and it didn't happen suddenly like the second scenario you wrote. Just cause she unlocked that fetish does not invalidate all the later sex scenes and developments as nonsense. I mean she did try to resist and took 3 different scenarios to develop the fetish haha.

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That would be sick tbh kinda perfect show for this type of thing especially how overly friendly Marin tends to be. I would also find Yor from spyxfamily perfect for it both have the perfect naivety.
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No please not Yor, don't want to ruin the wholesomeness of SpyxFamily. Anya, Yor and Loid bond should remain as such. Even if they do make it, it won't be even erotic because of the pre existing head canon.
 
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No please not Yor, don't want to ruin the wholesomeness of SpyxFamily. Anya, Yor and Loid bond should remain as such. Even if they do make it, it won't be even erotic because of the pre existing head canon.

A better suggestion would be Kenzen Robo Daimidaler (the whole powering up premise has a lot of NTR potential) or Tsūjō Kōgeki ga Zentai Kōgeki de ni Kai Kōgeki no Okā-san wa Suki Desuka? (the FMC is naive and hot and the MC is clueless just like Kirito), or some other NTR webnovel or lightnovel (which I'm sure there would be plenty of). My preference would be some Female warrior/Knight NTR, as in the female knight is in a relationship but slowly gets corrupted by a third guy (Curse of Kubel esque), or some office NTR where the couple works at different places, and the girl gets corrupted by a colleague.
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He chose the next story to implement the game? I have one of my favorite anime series that is suitable for NTR no worse than SAO. It's good that he didn't get it. In principle, I would like to see a similar game based on the series, but I definitely don't want it to be made as crudely as SAO. Let him hone his writing skills for a couple of years, and then he can make a game.
About favorite characters... I don't know, it doesn't work like that for me. No matter how disgusting the author showed Asuna in this game, I will gladly read the new continuation of the original novel by Reki Kivahara when it comes out. And there won't even be any associations with this game. I hope that you will have the same in the end. And various fanfics will not spoil your impressions of the original work.
 
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karlA29 said:
Well, as for me, this is the stupidest thing that the author of a game about corruption and NTR can cram into his plot. He puts an attitude in the heroine's head that she can't go against, and absolutely any nonsense can fit into this fetish. Here's an example for you.
Asuna goes to Kirito's house and hears the sounds of sex from Inoda's house. She looks into his room and sees Inoda lying on the bed with 2 women. It's clear from their appearance that they've been having sex for hours.…
Asuna–Inoda, what the hell are you doing?! Are you completely fucked up?
Inoda – Oh, Asuna, it's you! You know, I've been fucking these 2 sluts for 3 hours now. It seems that my penis already has calluses and it hurts. Come on, comfort me.
Asuna, under the influence of this fetish (maternal instinct), approaches Inode
Asuna - how do you want me to comfort you?
Inoda – First, gently suck it!
Asuna takes Inoda's cock in her mouth and starts sucking…
The situation is totally fucked up!!! but!!! She completely matches the received fetish!
What is the meaning of a work about corruption with such fetishes? With this approach, it was possible to write at the very beginning of the game when Asuna, Kirito and Inoda met.
Asuna – Who is this guy? Let's help him, Kirito!
Inoda stood up, took out his penis, and hit Asuna on the forehead with it.
Kirito – What the fuck are you doing, asshole?!
Meanwhile, Asuna falls to the ground on her back, spreads her legs and says – Fuck me any way you want, wherever you want and in any position!
That's the story of corruption.…
For me, the plot died precisely after Asuna received these two fetishes – "Maternal Instinct" and "Only Inoda's penis can satisfy Asuna." Approximately update 0.4 (sex in a tent in nature). After that, everything the author writes is just blah–blah-blah between the sex scenes of Asuna and Inoda. All these blah blah blah things don't affect the plot at all. And those who say that the only interesting character in the game right now is Suguha are absolutely right. There's at least some intrigue and development here. Everything else is just nonsense.
Again, this is a purely personal opinion. You can see it in a completely different way.
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Well, that's what happens when an author creates a plot for the first time based on slow corruption and breaks into his old habits. Fujino just went back to basics.

In fact, at this point, Asuna has practically separated herself from the plot and the corruption associated with the plot and has become just a fucking doll to fill the game with porn content and "NTR". In quotation marks, because with the departure from the plot, Asuna has lost touch with the rest of the characters and NTR is essentially gone. There's just Asuna who's just fucking with Inoda, and there's Kirito and everyone else (for now, although I think Kyoko and Liz can also be excluded) who are fluttering in the plot with the Council, the seed in Kirito's head, the Administrator, and Kirito's attempt to save(Suguha, we believe!)The only thin thread that still holds Asuna is her status in which she is "connected" to Kirito (which again is doubtful, because Fujino himself alienates Asuna with his "Current girlfriend" choices) and Yui in her stomach, but this also has little effect on Asuna herself. It generally looks extremely pathetic - in fact, they fulfilled the dream they were working hard to achieve, but Asuna's reaction to this, apart from a couple of phrases, is rather indifferent. Asuna's status doesn't say, "Finally, Yui will be with Kirito and me soon again. Hooray!" ,but"Kirito is watching me, how dare he. That asshole!". This already says what Asuna's priorities are and what her place in the plot is!
 
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Well, that's what happens when an author creates a plot for the first time based on slow corruption and breaks into his old habits. Fujino just went back to basics.

In fact, at this point, Asuna has practically separated herself from the plot and the corruption associated with the plot and has become just a fucking doll to fill the game with porn content and "NTR". In quotation marks, because with the departure from the plot, Asuna has lost touch with the rest of the characters and NTR is essentially gone. There's just Asuna who's just fucking with Inoda, and there's Kirito and everyone else (for now, although I think Kyoko and Liz can also be excluded) who are fluttering in the plot with the Council, the seed in Kirito's head, the Administrator, and Kirito's attempt to save(Suguha, we believe!)The only thin thread that still holds Asuna is her status in which she is "connected" to Kirito (which again is doubtful, because Fujino himself alienates Asuna with his "Current girlfriend" choices) and Yui in her stomach, but this also has little effect on Asuna herself. It generally looks extremely pathetic - in fact, they fulfilled the dream they were working hard to achieve, but Asuna's reaction to this, apart from a couple of phrases, is rather indifferent. Asuna's status doesn't say, "Finally, Yui will be with Kirito and me soon again. Hooray!" ,but"Kirito is watching me, how dare he. That asshole!". This already says what Asuna's priorities are and what her place in the plot is!
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Kiritos reaction wasn't any batter tbh, he literally showed more emotion after klling the bird before the treehouse event :LOL:
 
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Kiritos reaction wasn't any batter tbh, he literally showed more emotion after klling the bird before the treehouse event :LOL:
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"batter". I didn't immediately understand what was being said. English is not my native language.

Did you mean better? You know what the funny thing about all this is that Fujino almost exactly conveyed the character of Kirito from the original. Not very sociable, weakly emotional, usually often keeps thoughts to himself. So Kirito's reaction is quite logical, in the original he often also reacted to even the most high-profile victories. Plus, I think he was upset about the fight with Asuna.

Maybe it's the same for Asuna, now it's not that important. Maybe Fujino decided to show us that Asuna's maternal instinct is now fully working only for Inoda. Asuna wanted to bring Yui back with Kirito. But if she doesn't care about Kirito, then maybe Yui isn't that important either.
 
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He chose the next story to implement the game? I have one of my favorite anime series that is suitable for NTR no worse than SAO. It's good that he didn't get it. In principle, I would like to see a similar game based on the series, but I definitely don't want it to be made as crudely as SAO. Let him hone his writing skills for a couple of years, and then he can make a game.
About favorite characters... I don't know, it doesn't work like that for me. No matter how disgusting the author showed Asuna in this game, I will gladly read the new continuation of the original novel by Reki Kivahara when it comes out. And there won't even be any associations with this game. I hope that you will have the same in the end. And various fanfics will not spoil your impressions of the original work.
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What kind of series is this?
 
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First of all I'll give you credit for the first scenario you wrote that's hot. Next is it took quite awhile before introducing those perks and it didn't happen suddenly like the second scenario you wrote. Just cause she unlocked that fetish does not invalidate all the later sex scenes and developments as nonsense. I mean she did try to resist and took 3 different scenarios to develop the fetish haha.

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Yes, I know very well that this fetish has 3 iterations. And do you remember that thanks to its first version, Inoda and Asuna got one of the best sex scenes - sex in a tree house. Since English is not my native language, I missed the beginning of their conversation in a hurry, which can only be read in the memory room. And when I decided to translate this whole scene for myself, my eyes almost bled out from what I read - Inoda started his sad little tirade again. I am poor, unhappy. Only sucking mommy-Asuna's tits can make my life easier... Well, as for me, it's complete crap) I thought that he was telling her there that she was feeling bad, and Kirito left and abandoned them, but he was always ready to take care of her... NO! I'm a pathetic fuck, let me suck your tits, rub my dick against your crotch... I'll repeat - with such perks you can write any nonsense and always justify it with the logic of what's happening. Not that it's really bad. The worst thing about them is that they completely kill the intrigue of the work.
So I wrote that after getting these two perks, the story is over for me. And why? Because after that, even if Kirito finds out that Asuna is fucking Inoda and wants to get her back, he won't be able to. He can fuck Asuna 24 hours a day, 7 days a week... But Asuna needs to cum, and she can only cum from Inoda's dick... You can tell Asuna what a bastard Inoda is and how he manipulated her... But Inoda will say with a sad look that he is so pathetic and did it to be near Asuna, and now his life is over. And Asuna will run to console him. How - everyone understands))) That's how it is. I am ready to read nonsense and accept it, but such things actually kill the work for me.
 
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"batter". I didn't immediately understand what was being said. English is not my native language.

Did you mean better? You know what the funny thing about all this is that Fujino almost exactly conveyed the character of Kirito from the original. Not very sociable, weakly emotional, usually often keeps thoughts to himself. So Kirito's reaction is quite logical, in the original he often also reacted to even the most high-profile victories. Plus, I think he was upset about the fight with Asuna.

Maybe it's the same for Asuna, now it's not that important. Maybe Fujino decided to show us that Asuna's maternal instinct is now fully working only for Inoda. Asuna wanted to bring Yui back with Kirito. But if she doesn't care about Kirito, then maybe Yui isn't that important either.
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Yeah, maybe, but this whole Yui arc felt like a regular quest, which is weird since it could’ve and logically should've been the last opportunity to show some emotional bond between Asuna and Kirito before the complete fall.
 
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What kind of series is this?
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Oregairu. I'd like quality NTRs with consistent endings - about 10 of them))) (dreams-dreams). And not this - Dumb Yukino gets a dick on the forehead and into bed, Yui is immediately a slut, Iroha fucks the entire football team under hypnosis...
 
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Yeah, maybe, but this whole Yui arc felt like a regular quest, which is weird since it could’ve and logically should've been the last opportunity to show some emotional bond between Asuna and Kirito before the complete fall.
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Apparently, this was Fujino's idea to show by contrast how bad the relationship between Asuna and Kirito is now. It looks much worse than in the digital indicator. Inoda currently has 600, and Kirito has 800+. Although Asuna treats Kirito roughly like a 300+ Inoda. That's the problem, why do these numbers if they don't correspond to what's happening? You can only get confused. Or again, this is some kind of grand plan by Fujino... or great inexperience in prescribing romantic relationships. :ROFLMAO:
 
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Oregairu. I'd like quality NTRs with consistent endings - about 10 of them))) (dreams-dreams). And not this - Dumb Yukino gets a dick on the forehead and into bed, Yui is immediately a slut, Iroha fucks the entire football team under hypnosis...
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Hmm, it might be suitable, but the main character is slightly peculiar. Maybe Hachiman will just think, "Well, it's good that someone else is fucking her now. It's easier for me that way. Finally having a rest" It might be worth paying attention to the Bunny Girl or Danmachi. While Bell is going through the dungeons, Hestia works part-time in another place, along with Aiz.:sneaky:
 
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Let's remember who YUI is from the original... Part of the AI, created to accompany the emotional state of people in a deadly game and finally realized itself upon discovering an extra-strong emotional connection between 2 people against the background of a general background of hopelessness... And here Asuna and Kirito summon YUI to this world. YUI looks at them - and what the fuck happened here in a couple of months?! )))
I wonder what Asuna was thinking about when she passionately wanted to bring YUI back with her current relationship with Kirito and Inoda... Nothing. The author just needs decorations)))
 
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Let's remember who YUI is from the original... Part of the AI, created to accompany the emotional state of people in a deadly game and finally realized itself upon discovering an extra-strong emotional connection between 2 people against the background of a general background of hopelessness... And here Asuna and Kirito summon YUI to this world. YUI looks at them - and what the fuck happened here in a couple of months?! )))
I wonder what Asuna was thinking about when she passionately wanted to bring YUI back with her current relationship with Kirito and Inoda... Nothing. The author just needs decorations)))
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Given the events with Inoda and the fact that Yui flew up to him instead of Kirito, the question arises, is it Yui? Probably not anymore.
 
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